Prologue
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Spectral quickly flew through the castle halls heading toward the Throne Room. When he arrived the King and Queen both sat in their thrones, uneasy looks on their faces.

"Majesty," Spectral said landing on his perch between the two thrones.

"Spectral, the time of prophecy is finally at hand, go to Jowy, get him out of here," King Joseph said.

"No, I want to fight by your side Sire," Spectral said.

"No my Adviser, you have been with me for all of these many years, Jowy needs you now," King Avilon said. Spectral just looked up at his King, pleadingly.

"Please old friend, get Jowy out of here," Joseph said. That's when the castle started to shake.

"Take with you the Crystaltear, keep our boy safe Spectral," the King said. The King walked over to where the legendary sword hung on it's mantle. He removed it and it started to glow. A moment later it had shrunken into a sphere. Spectral flew over and grasped it between his left talon.

"Tell Jowy we love him," Queen Amelia said.

With a final sad glance at the King and Queen, Spectral took off. The attack had been swift and sever damage had already been done to the castle. Spectral flew fast avoiding the flames trying to reach the young Prince before it was too late. As he flew the smell of burning bodies and death filled his nose making his feel sick to his stomach.

'This is ridiculous, why do so many have to die and for what, a damn prophecy to be fulfilled, this just isn't worth it!" he raged in his thoughts. Finally he arrived at Jowy's door and flew inside. The young prince was curled up in a corner on the verge of crying.

"Jowy, come on, we have to get out of here," Spectral said. The young boy looked up at Spectral and sniffled.

"Where is Mommy and Daddy?" he inquired.

"They are fine, they wanted me to get you out of here though, think you can be a big boy and follow me like your mom and dad wanted?" Spectral asked. Jowy puffed out his chest and nodded.

"That's a brave lad," Spectral said. He then flew out of the room, the Prince not far behind. As they turned a corner the young Jowy spotted a few dead bodies. Jowy quickly ran over to one and started shaking it.

"Hey come on, get up," the young Prince pleaded. The body did not respond and Jowy started shaking more forcefully.

"Why won't you wake up, please get up, mommy and daddy need your help," he pleaded some more, tears now streaming down his face. Spectral flew around and landed on a piece of debris that had come from a pillar adorning the hallway.

"I don't think he is going to wake up Jowy," Spectral said sadly to his Prince. The youth quickly gazed to his friend.

"Why not, he has too, if he doesn't then the fire and bad people will hurt him," the child argued, not really understanding death at his age. Spectral just lowered his head as the fire in the hall seemed to get more violent.

"I will explain to you later but we have to get going, it is an order from your mother and father that I keep the fire or bad people from hurting you," he explained. Jowy finally gave up his efforts to awaken the dead soldier and got to his feet once more.

'Ziel you damned fool, you will someday pay for ripping a child from his home like this,' the old Bird thought to himself coldly. The Adviser led Jowy to one of the many secret passages out of the castle. They went into the underground tunnels and came out on a small hill with a small private dock overlooking the kingdom of Brodaria. The entire kingdom was ablaze. Jowy looked over the horizon at the destruction. The smoke raising high over the now countless dead Brood. Spectral felt a deep hatred at what he saw before him. The grave site to the Dragon people burning before his very eyes. Spectral for once was glad he was a bird, otherwise he would be crying and raging in anger right now. He then looked to the young Prince that was now his to protect, who was crying huddled up by a tree, not understanding why he was being ripped from his home and parents. The old Bird was disgusted that Ziel had forced a boy his age to learn the meaning of what had happened here too early in his long life.

'Someday Ziel, you will get what you deserve for killing so many and corrupting an innocent boy,' the Bird thought to himself. Finally Jowy got to his feet, sniffling to try and choke back the tears and walked to the ledge of the small dock overlooking his burning home.

"Spectral, someday I will get back at the meanies who did this." Jowy said innocently, not really knowing at this point what would come with those words.

"And someday you will Jowy, someday you will." Spectral said, unable to get over his rage at the sight before him although he knew it was coming.
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Ziel sat on the throne of the slain King of the Dragons, an annoyed look on his face.

"One has escaped me, our task is not yet finished, as long as even one of the foul creatures live, it will ruin my plans." Ziel stated simply. Four shadows appeared in the room, all kneeling before their master.

"Find him, I don't care if it takes a hundred years, find the little boy." Ziel ordered. With a nod the four shadows vanished.

Hmmm... this looks familiar somehow... but I can't put my finger on it...

I assume things'll start to deviate within your next post.

It's from the beginning of the RP XD

Forgive me. I forgot to mark my sarcasm with smilies. ;P

Wow, you're such a jerk XD

I wanna see something new *bounces up and down in seat*

Critique time:

Good: You do well at capturing a young child's personality. You can just tell that he has a limited view of things and yet also see how these major events are affecting him... it really makes me want to see the transition to when he's a teenager/adult. Just the contrast of innocent child to full understanding.

Bad: Lots of dialogue and not enough description. Also, i know from RPs that you are really good at reflection and I think this scene, which is an emotional turmoil scene, really could use a lot of reflection so we can get the full impact of the fact that EVERYBODY is dead!

Glad you like it and thanks for the advise, when I go through and edit it into final draft version I will use everything that people point out to me and make it better, that is the reason I am going to be posting the rough draft versions of the chapters, get your guys' opinions on what the chapter could use and possible what could be removed. So any and all critique is welcome here.

I think this is going well, Jowy. And it seems like the char is exactly like you when you were little. Not much has changed......

I went through and changed and added some things to the prologue, hopefully what I did makes it better.

It's good, no put more story. You haven't updated any of yours for a while!

Well, here is the very first rough draft of chapter 1...




Chapter 1
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Jowy walked through the Eteru Forest, nothing more on his mind than finding the proper animal for his next meal. Up above was his best friend and adviser Spectral. Jowy was now eighteen in age and had become quit masterful with a sword, training on a daily basis with the Avilon family heirloom. Spectral flew down from the trees and landed gingerly on his companions shoulder.

"Sorry Jowy, I didn't spot a thing, something is afoot, there is nothing stirring about aside from us." the old Bird said.

"I know, the forest being this quite is kinda creepy." the youth said. The duo continued on in the hopes of finding something. The two companions had arrived in the Kingdom of Eteru by boat shortly after their escape from Avilon castle. Spectral had raised and protected the boy in the thirteen years they since then, living off the land and for the most part they had found a small but cozy cave near the mountain range known as Mt. Luveisue which was considerably close to the forest.

"Well, I guess it will be more stew tonight, and I was so hoping for meat." Jowy said, disappointed. The silver haired youth turned and started heading for home when Spectral noticed a figure heading straight for them. Curious the bird urged his companion to stop. The stranger in question was female and scantily clad at that, wearing nothing more than a black strapless bra and a mini skirt, with black knee high boots and fishnet leggings. The woman before them eminated a dark aura and this concerned Spectral.

"Who are you?" Jowy demanded. The woman just gazed at the youth, sizing him up.

"Tell me boy, you wouldn't happen to be of the Avilon family would you?" she questioned.

"Yeah, I am the last of the Avilon lineage, why does that concern you?" the youth demanded. The woman's mouth curved into a twisted smile.

"Because, you are about to die." she said with a coy voice. She withdrew a giant Razor Ring and lunged at the Brodarian. Jowy didn't have time to draw his sword and defend himself when her Razor Ring cut into his left arm. Jowy let out a cry of pain as he managed to finally draw his sword with his right hand. He brought it around and caught the woman with a slash across her stomach before she could dislodge her weapon from his arm. The woman, weapon in hand stumbled back with her free hand across the wound.

"You little rat, you will pay for that." she seethed.

"I will ask once more, who are you witch?" Jowy demanded, pointing his sword at her for added effect. She spit on the ground and her lips curved into a smile once more.

"I am Sielnei, one of the Four Divas of the Ziel's Dark Forces, we have hunted you long and hard at my master's request and this day, his wish of all Dragons being dead will come to fruition." she cackled. Jowy just looked at the woman with an incredulous look on his face.

"She is crazy." Jowy stated in a low voice to his winged companion. Sielnei then glared back at the Brodarian Prince.

"Joseph, run." Spectral stated in a low monotone voice. The youth simply looked at his partner then simply nodded and took off at top speed. Sielnei let out a shriek of annoyance and chased after Jowy. The youths knowledge of the forest gave him a distinct advantage in trying to escape but the mad woman who chased him was persistent, to say the least. Jowy ran with all of his might and used his knowledge of the terrain to his every advantage but still yet Sielnei continued her chase, and was actually even gaining on him. Spectral had taken to the air when the silver haired youth started running so he could move faster and when needed, provided cover fire for his young charge. Jowy let out a sigh and turned back to see where the woman who had attacked him was and only saw a Razor Ring flying right at him.

"Oh Shi..." he started. Before he could finish the statement the Razor Ring caught him in the back, cutting into him and knocking him to the ground.

"Ahhhh!" Jowy cried in pain as he slowly got back to his feet. Spectral quickly made a 180 degree turn and started to fire beams of purple energy at the woman who was giving them chase, to allow his young charge to get moving again. One of the beams collided into the woman sending her sprawling to the ground. Silenei let out a snarl as she looked up at the Bird.

"When I am finished with the child, I think Bird wings will make a most delicious supper for my master," Sielnei raged. Jowy had recovered himself and instead of turning to run, had come back to face the woman had attacked him.

"What are you doing?" the old Bird inquired coming in and landing on low tree branch.

"At this rate Spec, I am going to get slaughtered," the youth said. He leaned forward a little with the Crystaltear held horizontallly in front of him.

"You will be slaughtered quicker by trying to fight," Spectral said, trying to convince the Dragon youth to keep running.

"You make this too easy boy, Master Ziel will be pleased," the Diva said having made it back to her feet as well.

"Lotus Cut!" Jowy cried out. He vanished from where he stood and reappeared behind the woman on one knee, his sword extended out now with the tip of the blade touching the rich green grass of the forest. A red line appeared across Sielnei's mid section and a giant gash appeared causing her to drop her weapon and rage in pain. The silver haired youth returned to his feet and sighed before once more running deep into the forest once more to try and escape, Spectral flying over head.

Can't wait for more! This is getting good!

And all of a sudden the most superior awesome insane wizard Dementis appears from no where and throws fireballs and the stupid meanie lady!! End of story...

Dementis rocks! *flex*

That is canon right? jk

Get more up, Jowy! I know you're on the forums somewhere.....

Designia please entertain yourself by reading this awesome RP that the story (or is it the other way around?) spawned from. (ah whatever).

The Legends of Tomorrow

Dementis for the freaking win!! I hope Gary and FAn get back soon...

The story spawned the RP Sal, it was based off the basis of the novel that I made the RP.