Bow before me ( an Under the Sea, Richard parody)

The carnage is always greater
In some other warlock’s war
You could spend your time fearing him
But that is a big mistake
Just look at what I am doing
Right in your king's backyard
When my pieces sit in motion
Tell me what could scare you more!

Bow before me
Bow before me
No one is better
No heart is deader
Take what you want
The king’s armies wasting away
Out there children slave away
While they devotin'
My enemies frozin'
Bow before me

Under my rule all will obey
Through the mines they slave all day
Those lively and free aren’t happy
They all bored 'cause they are safe
But those in the kingdoms is lucky
They in for a worser fate
Some day soon when I get to them
Guess who's gon' be on my plate

Bow before me
Bow before me
It is time to start
Frying is dying
In agony
You are what I don’t live to kill
There is no way to fight me
It’s too late for flight
The realm is mine now
Bow before me

Bow before me
Since no fun remains
I have to leave now
Essentially
I know the strong and the brave
In fear, they cave to my ways
I have the whole world
Was I stuttering?
Bow before me

The imps take the wimps
Dead rise and see red
The bones cry and moan
Things lookin' my way
Spurning are burning
Our fate is to hate
The spook is the duke of coal

(Fwoom)

Faithful are frightened
The priests turn to yeast
Devout fadin' out
The shriek she can see
The dark and the damned
They know who I am
An' oh blowhard king blow

Bow before me
Bow before me
When paladins start
The smart use black arts
You confuse me
What did they offer the land? Just demand
Have deformations from brands!
Dedicate your life
With all of your soul
Bow before me

belittle each slave here
Cuttin' themselves here
Bow before me
Fools who tried to sail
Know what a flail is
Call me a rotter
Head under water
Ya out of luck here
All turned to muck here
Bow before me

Oh snap! I'd have to listen to the tune of the song before I can truly enjoy it. I have a link for anyone else who wants it.

http://www.devedia.com/dosghost/music/underse2.mid

DO IT! IT'S BEUTIFUL! I USED THE LYRICS AND READ AT SAME TIME! srry for caps i'm emotional.

Can I get this pinned?

Is this the final version or do you plan on editing it? As fun as the lyrics look and as awesome as the song is, there's a syllable complication. Maybe you should sing it for us so we'd know. o.O

idk but if you can email it to the creaters of slaughter your world it could be created

It will probably need allot of editing if it was actually used for anything (I wrote this in one hour) but the song is really close to the original.

yah i don't really see ritchard saying bow be fore me instead of just killing them
i like the song but if you think about it he really doesn't fit

Shouldn't this be posted in the Fan-Fic thread? We already have two or three song parodies over there.

Which thread is that? I don't see it on the page...

http://lfgcomic.com/forum/index.php?showto...1782&st=400

That's the last page.

Not to be rude to my fellow writers, but a parody of a song this complicated and long is worthy of its own thread.

This and this are the samples I used wile writing it penth.

well you could send the song to someone to create it

I have edited it some, all the rhyming follows the song nearly perfect now and I changed a few lines to make it flow better. If anyone sees something they think should be changed specifically pm me and I will consider it.

The syllabic problem is the only one there is. I've spent my precious time to count em up for you :0 (mainly because I have nothing else to do on a Friday night...)

Original : Yours

8 : 8
7 : 8
8 : 5
7 : 7
8 : 8
7 : 5
8 : 8
7 : 5

total-
60:54

4 : 4
4 : 4
5 : 5
5 : 5
4 : 5
8 : 7
7 : 10
5 : 5
5 : 8
4 : 4 (though you left it blank, 'bow before me' is assumed)

total-
51:57

8 : 9
7 : 6
8 : 9
7 : 6
8 : 10
7 : 7
8 : 7
7 : 7

total-
60:61

4 : 4
4 : 4
5 : 9
5 : 6
4 : (don't know what happened here, can't divide it well)
8 : (same)
7 : (same)
5 : 4
5 : 4
4 : 4

total-
51:52

4 : 4
5 : 6
5 : 4
4 : 5
8 : 7
7 : 8
5 : 4
5 : 6
4 : 4

total-
47:48

5 : 5
5 : 6
5 : 5
5 : 7
5 : 6
5 : 5
7 : 7

total-
37:41

5 : 6
5 : 5
5 : 6
5 : 4
5 : 5
5 : 5
6 : 9

total-
36:40

4 : 4
4 : 4
5 : 6
5 : 6
4 : 6
8 : 8
7 : 9
5 : 5
5 : 5
4 : 4

total-
51:57

5 : 8
5 : 5
4 : 4
5 : 6
5 : 6
5 : 8
5 : 8
5 : 5
5 : 5
4 : 4

total-
48:60

grand total-
441:450

I added those totals to see if it was possible to split sentences and still make it work, it helped me keep score. If you can fix this, than I see no problem with a recommendation for an actual use Maybe, well it's all up to SohLar in the end.

In all fairness a 2% difference isn't allot. I can fix it I think but it is too late tonight and will probably take me several hours.

No, a 2% difference is not much. But in music, one can beg to differ. When one mistake is made when someone sings because of one off note that's hard to sing, that part is remembered, etched into the mind. There's several parts where a single sound has to be stretched or a lot of sounds have to be squished together in your song, it is quite difficult to sing. I tired to sing it aloud myself, it sounds pretty good, but the difficult lyrics stand out to me. However, it's not my song. You do with it whatever you want.

Ever still, it has the makings of greatness

Believe it or not thats the first song parody I have ever written, I didn't even consider syllabic balance when I wrote it. I will make the corrections asap.

I don't know what time zone your in, but I wouldn't recommend making corrections late at night, so don't do it 'asap' if that is the case. Nobody's pushing you to do it now, it might be better to get a good night's sleep, and then continue when you're in the mood of the song. The song has a happy theme to it, so wait until you're relaxed and in a good mood. As for me, I've got to go to bed myself before I continue rambling on this... I've spent the, what, hour? with this song as the center of my attention...

Are we talking about the same Richard?

If you fix up these lyrics, I'll get me a karaokeversion of the original song, don my Richard costume and sing it for you!

YAY! i get to hear something other than keyboards

lol

well good luck on editing the song.
If there anything i can help with let me know

Done! It is balanced and everything now (if anyone wants to check, I would appreciate it.)! Get your robe on it is time to earn that "Lord of the Dance" Title. However, it is a very difficult song. If you want to back out you can.

love to hear that sometime

Have you ever heard Richard's title? He loves to rule over people.

KA-LAPOWABOOM!
Awesome, it's fun to sing to! (Or maybe it's just me, whom likes singing o.O regardless of how horrid my voice is...)

So I take it I got the balance right this time? I would love to see Richard singing this and dancing around like Sebastian the crab

Off the bat (meaning without careful attention), I can only find one error still. Line two is a syllable short, other than that... no, I can't find any. Someone could try to make a video, but being fan-made, it'd take a lot of time and effort to make a good one. Cyberborn promised to sing it for us though.

Ninja fixed . Also, if you see through it and think of a a line that would work better PM me about it.

Hehe, I am not a man for empty promises. I will definetily sing this song!

Might take me a while to get it recorded and filming the actual video, but I'll definetily have it done before a month. Also, some parts of the song are still a bit off. But I can work around that when I'm recording the song, so don't worry

Man it's hard not to sing this with a jamaican accent...

well im going to quote my friend and say
"sucks to be you"

wierd thought: what do you think richard would sound like if he had a Jamaican accent

Also, anyone who likes my writing and/or is atleast amused by my idealogical banter please boost my star rating, that Incredibly nice person who gave me a rating of a bad star because I obviously am not following the forum rules (mod edit)


This is where Kayhynn is frigging tired of the flaming. Carcer, this is your LAST nice warning before a 24 hour cool off period. I hope i have made myself clear.

--Kayhynn

It's quite comical how you've been throwing out those flame warriors like that

Thank you, I use it as a source to help keep my posts shorter and emphasise my points.

Wow, I didn't realize that you were using your own advice from that one thread. That's pretty dedicated for a forum philosophy, I'm literally smiling.

If nothing else, no one can accuse me of not practicing what I preach.

I'll probably sing this,if I could pull off a RIchard-esque voice...or if I knew
how to sing "under the sea".

Perhaps I should do fanart of this similar to Frosun's?*ponders again*

I don't see them doing this largely because by now they probably have their songs written and won't want to give you money for this one.

The song is funny, but the random failures to match rhyme scheme in a song that is all about wordplay and twisting phrases kinda throw it for me.

Sohmer is the next Yankovitch, only much, much cooler.

Its a fan fic, I don't expect to them use it. If they did I wouldn't expect to get payed as long as I got credit. You are right, I screwed up the rhyme scheme when I fixed the syllabic balance (originally it had a perfect rhyme scheme but bad syllabic balance)and that is an acceptable mistake for a beginner. I will work on it next next weekend when I have time off again.

In hind sight i probably should of chose an easier song and done this one later. Thats not going to stop me from finishing what I started though.

I like this one alongside 'Slaughter the World'.
Figures that Richard would love 'The Little Mermaid'.
Now I wanna hear him sing the whole damn musical.
Teeheehee...

Personally I think Richard should sing this (second song not first song) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rMDGMdMbr1Q with the exception that it's I'll burn your eyes till they bleed instead of stab

WOOT! FOAMYNESS!

Man...how could I miss that awesome connection!? This will definetily be something worth singing while in my costume, yes

Hmm, I wonder what happened to my Church of Foamy card

Faomy turned to shit the second Johnathan Ian Mathers' balls dropped.

I am seriously getting confused at this point...

So am I, I won't be able to work on the song this weekend, I have a 9 1/2hour test Wednesday.